Comparison Essay:
Mothers and Trees
There are storms that will strike throughout the years that will produce damage to trees….some damages will be massive while others will be minimal. There will be numerous hot days that will produce damages to the trees; as well. The goal is to keep the weather calm, sunny, uneventful in order to ensure strength for the trees so that they can remain strong. A good mother will understand the comparisons between herself and the significance of a tree.
Trees provide shelter for birds and other forest animals. When winter winds blow and sleet is falling to the ground the tree will sway and crystallize and will do it’s best not to break. This is similar to a mother caring for her children. She will do whatever it takes to protect her children and provide a safe and caring environment for them to live.
Tree branches sway in the breeze and occasionally a branch breaks off and falls to the ground. We see this happen a lot in the fall of the year. This reminds me of small incidents that occur in children’s lives—whether it be a broken bone or breaking up with your first boyfriend. A mothers branch may break off of the tree when she sees her children upset but her tree does not falter. She is still there to listen and give support and continues to be flexible and sway in the wind.
A much bigger storm comes and a huge limb crashes to the ground and part of the tree is split down the center. This reminds me of the devastation that mothers may have to potentially face with their children regarding divorce, death, and life threatening injuries or illnesses. Her heart is breaking for her children—people wonder how she will ever stay strong enough to withstand the damages…..but she does.
Trees are strong, protective, are able to sway and sometimes will break. A good mother will always protect her children, keep them warm and fed and provide a nurturing environment for them to live. They will also go with the flow as their children face small obstacles in their lives whether it be happy or sad. Mothers are a lot like trees—they may bend a little but they never break
You've got a structure, an outline, an idea--but this needs justgolden in it. Right now it applies to any mother, any tree, any life--it's generic, not individual.
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